Critiquing Song of the Day: “Straight Lines” by Silverchair
It’s time to take another look at your awesome first lines! Last week, we requested and you all came through big time! Please Note: You can STILL critique for Day 1–I’m sure the authors would love more feedback. 🙂
Brief overview: we’re posting some first lines entries from a few of our brave followers, and you all help them out by giving them feedback (which you guys rock at, by the way).
We mentioned this yesterday, but we’re known for repeating ourselves. Here are some questions to ask yourself when critiquing:
1. Does the opening shock you?
2. Does the opening pull you in and make you want to read more?
3. Is the voice apparent?
4. Do you have an idea of the pending conflict?
5. Do you get a sense of the setting?
Anything else that you can help them out with would be great. Remember, you don’t HAVE to answer all of these questions. Heck, you don’t even have to comment on each of the entries, but it sure would be nice. 🙂 Here’s our next 4 submissions:
Genre: New Adult
Author’s Name: Alicia Gregoire
First Lines: I was late for the first day of freshman orientation, but as far as I was concerned, it was justified. My best friend, my confidant, the sole person who understood the betrayal I had felt when I discovered my ex with someone else, had left me that morning for the army. The understatement of the year would be to say that I handled his departure poorly.
Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
Author’s Name: Amie Kaufman
First Lines: Samuel was already running when the miller’s shed exploded. The wind whistled behind him and he closed his eyes as it overtook him, lifting him off his feet. For a brief moment, he soared.
Title: The Way Things Fall Apart
Genre: YA Contemporary
Author’s Name: Danielle Bunner
First Lines: It all started when the cold came. Fast, brittle, unexpected. That first morning in late October when it snowed on the way to school and I stopped walking to watch it all fall around me.
Author’s Name: Alex Mullarky
First Lines: Even in the dark I could tell it was there. It is the black shape in the sky that blots out the stars.